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halo7
03-19-2005, 03:42 PM
*let me remind you this is a work in progress story and is up for any crititcal bashing*

Prosecution:

Laywer 1: Mr. waker you are aware that your under oath?
Matt: yes sir.
Laywer 1: I need you to answer me honestly Did you or did you not kill your wife Cynthia Marie Baker on the night of October 8'th 1987.

*sound of a gunshot as we move to a black screen as matt begins to narate*
Matt/narration: Ive killed alot of people, Ruined a whole lot of families, what can i say im a ruthless guy; But im not that ruthless. I did not kill my wife.

*title screen* PROSECUTION.
Matt/narration: ive never had an easy life. my earliest memory is a bad one. i was 3 years old growing up in Birmingham, Alabama and lets just say i didnt grow up in the best enviroment.

Emmet: What the f*** is your problem. I come home and you accuse me like this. Ive never been insulted this way god damnit.

Mother: I know youve been sleeping around with that tramp down the street Amanda Portly.

Emmet: How dare you say that to me i love you.

Mother: I found these in your suit pocket.

Emmet: Thats not yours?

Mother: Ugh you disgust me im leaving you emmet and im taking matt with me, Ive already packed.

Emmet: I suggest you not taking another f***ing step.

Mother: Matt come here sweety were leaving.

Emmet: You b****

Matt/Narration: it was about this time that my dad hit my mother so hard that he bashed her face in,this went on for about an hour until her skull was completly bashed in. Ever since then my dad thought i was too young to remember. but im not sure why i never told him i knew guess i was too scared he would kill me too. Wasnt till about 6 years later till i would see my dad again. he left me there. Im not sure how he got away clean with it. I never knew much about the case. I wasnt gonna talk i dont think they ever knew my name till they found my birth certificate wadded up behind the couch. they sent me to a foster home in Georgia.Where i lived with the Waker's.

To Be continued. any comments?

The WupZter
03-19-2005, 05:42 PM
Wow, sounds interesting. I like the disturbing and dark atmosphere, so in other words i like to hear more

rosncranz
03-22-2005, 11:39 PM
very amature, its ok, but very amature. Also the way it is written it says amanda portly is the name of the road, and portly is usually a "nice" way of calling someone short and fat, not sure if this was intended, if so nice work, if not...